Thursday, March 19, 2009
Intro to paper
I will never forget the day I lost the most loving figure in my life. That day was like any other; I went to school thinking my mother had just stayed at her boyfriend's house and would return later that evening from work. I was sitting on the living room couch reading for my English class, and my twin brother was in his bedroom playing a computer game. All of a sudden, my sister came into our house with no warning, and behind her was a police officer and my mother's boyfriend, but no mother. I knew immediately something was wrong by the expressions on their faces. I quickly asked where my mother was. My sister held back tears and told me that her my mother's boyfriend had found her dead when he returned home from work. My mother had passed away in her sleep. I felt liek someone had dropped a bomb on top of my emotions. I was hysterical, and could not believe what I had heard. I ran back and forth screaming. Being sixteen years old, thoughts like "she will never get to see us graduate, or see her grandchildren," were scrambled through my mind. The loss of a mother, a friend, and a loved one to many was due to a sudden reaction to a medication a doctor had presribed just two days before. One prescription drug had taken a life. So, now I am determined to find ways to prevent death of anyone else, and help those who have gone through any situation like this.
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A good beginning, Lacie. I think the end sentences of this paragraph should be refined a little once you write the entire thing. But this provides you a springboard to start the informational part of the paper. What I think might be a good transition is a series of questions that you have probably been asking yourself since this happened. You could put these questions all lumped into one paragraph--after this one. Then start off with something like "With these questions in mind, I started my research by looking into ......."
ReplyDeleteSo keep going!!I know it's hard, but one step at a time. Just one paragraph!